Far Beneath

In Fiction on December 6, 2013 at 5:21 pm


Far Beneath

Sunlight strikes the basin and reflections dazzle.
Shining waves are chasing as I slowly paddle.

I pull the oars, myopic, intent upon the beach,
while depths of wondrous mysteries lumber


far beneath.

This short poem is my response to this week’s Trifextra challenge, which was to add 30 words to these three: Myopic, Dazzle and Basin.

Let me know what you think in the comments below, and check out the rest of this week’s stories!

  1. Lovely, lyrical and mysterious, all wrapped up in one, neat 33-word poem. Great work, as always, Brian!

  2. My favorite use of myopic thus far!

  3. Lyrical and beautiful, Brian. Especially this line: depths of wondrous mysteries lumber

  4. Oh, beautiful – what mysteries we miss while looking the other way.

  5. Oh this one I really love.. the lake with its mysteries beneath.

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