The Gods Are Sleeping

In Fiction on April 12, 2013 at 7:02 pm

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The Gods Are Sleeping

“The gods are sleeping, dreaming the world—dreaming us—but their dreams have been darker of late: Loam turns to ash and the sun retreats.”

“We must act, lest these nightmares wake them.”

(photo credit: theseanster93)

Let’s get metaphysical. This is my response to the weekend’s Trifextra writing challenge, which was to write 33 words inspired by this Paulo Coehlo quote:

“It’s the possibility of having a dream come true that makes life interesting.”

Obviously I took the prompt pretty broadly, but hopefully it still worked out. I thought making it a dialogue between two unnamed speakers would give a good bit of mystery to it, but I’d love to here what you think.

Happy weekend everyone!

  1. Better not to have nightmares wake sleeping gods, that’s for sure! Especially if the world’s about to end. Cryptic and threatening. *shiver*

  2. Ooh, I love how mysterious this is Brian! Love the line “Loam turns to ash and the sun retreats.” Great take on the prompt – and wonderful job building tension in those 33 words.

  3. The gods are very angry indeed, I think, with the way life is going of late.

  4. Reblogged this on The Cheese Whines and commented:
    The gods are very angry indeed, I think, with the way life is going of late.

  5. Powerful stuff and creative take on the prompt. Great image. Can feel the anger of the gods behind those clouds!

  6. interesting – lots of possibilities

  7. Love this-great take & possibility of this being true is very high-hope we all pay heed & reform ourselves before these dreams turn to dust or nightmares replace them!Great job:-)

  8. I like the broad interpretation. Hell, I talked about the possibility of a spider in a box 😛 Very cool piece.

  9. This is so good. I want to know more, and it was so beautifully written.

  10. thought provoking, Brian. Beautifully thought provoking

  11. ooo intriguing … nice exploration of the prompt along this dimension ! 🙂

  12. I love that no matter how dark the nightmare, their waking would surely be worse. Those are some tough and terrible gods. Nicely done.

  13. Very intriguing response and juxtaposition between dream and nightmare. Great take on the prompt!

  14. “Loam turns to ash” – this phrase just feels beautiful on the tongue. I love how you interpreted this broadly, as you say. Fantastic.

  15. Absolutely loved the feel of this piece. Powerful!

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