Double Bass Concerto

In Fiction on January 11, 2013 at 10:59 am

2 Double bass in a locker

Double Bass Concerto

The body slid down the wall and sat, silent, without the thrum of its heart.

No one had missed the soloist yet. The double bass concerto was planned for the second half of the program: Giovanni Bottesini. Concerto No. 2 in B minor.

A shame, really… it would have been beautiful.

But musicians have debts just like the rest of us, and their money tends to be tied up in instruments. This particular double bass, for instance, was worth about $17,000, and, though it didn’t quite cover what the musician owed, Rick figured it was close enough – for jazz.

Rick smiled, and yet he was sad.

He liked music.




After a couple week’s absent, this is my response to the Friday Fictioneers prompt (care of Rochelle Wisoff Fields). This week’s prompt (the photo up yonder) was provided by Roger Cohen.

If you’d like to read some really good stories based on that prompt, go ahead and click the little blue fella to check them out. You won’t be disappointed.

As always, I’m looking forward to hearing what you think of my story. Criticism is more than welcome!

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  1. I like this, reminds me of Tony Curtis and Jack Lemmon fleeing “The Mob” in the film “Some Like It Hot”. Especially liked “without the thrum of its heart” alhough associated more with musical instruments, I can see why you used thrum here. Nice
    Dee

  2. A hit man with, if not a conscience, at least a love for music. Nice.

  3. Welcome back, Brian. I was wondering where you’d gone! Hard-hitting story this week.

  4. Hey Brian,
    I missed your work, man. Glad to see you are back. Straight forward, like your MC. A cold calculated man who values money more than human life. Well told. I Like that he smiles at the end, taking pleasure in his gains and maybe even in the other man’s death.

    Tom

  5. Excellent! Great take on the prompt. That is one thing I always think about when I look at these instruments. They are like treasures and so delicate. I liked this a lot. It’s one of the best stories I’ve read today.

    • Well thank you, indeed – that’s nice of you to say!

    • Hi Seamus Yes commercial autndiois are a tough game. But as I mention in the book you have to look out for clues to help you and you need to prepare even if its a commercial with no dialogue. Remember ever audition is an advertisement of you and your craftHow did you find the book ?

  6. Hi Brian,
    Dying for your art, how noble. Those music store guys are heartless! Very well written, as your stories always are. Ron

  7. That was a different take on the prompt. Nice one Brian.

  8. this is brilliant. and i wish i wrote this haha

  9. Dear Brian,
    Your last line was the perfect ending. The only remorse the hit man had…He liked music. Nice.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

  10. Eeep! And there I was, wondering how you’d manage to make this one sinister. Silly me…

  11. Dear Brian,

    Welcome back.

    Loved your story and the MC who loves music but not people, money, but not those who owe.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  12. Wow, what an original take. I really like the musical remorse of the hit man.

  13. this is wonderful. great little story in a few words. loved the last line.

  14. Yes! Another crime piece! Not that the others were not good, but Yay!

  15. well done. debts are debts. so “it” goes from classical to jazz, great ending.

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